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That is what mortals misunderstand. They say of some temporal suffering, 'No future bliss can make up for it,' not knowing that Heaven, once attained, will work backwards and turn even that agony to glory. And of some sinful pleasure they say 'Let me but have this and I'll take the consequences': little dreaming how damnation will spread back and back into their past and contaminate the pleasure of the sin.
-Spirit Teacher, The Great Divorce by C.S. Lewis
Poetism Commentary: “my pathetic attempt”
The poem in question: my pathetic attempt
Originally titled, “my pathetic attempt to tell you how much,” This is one of those silly poems that you write for a girl. You know that kind? Yeah.
The poem is dated 11/3/97, but I’m pretty sure the original pre-dates that by a few months. I do have the original text, which I’ll post below.
The girl I was dating at the time (the second one from A Lesson To Be Learned) used to tell me that I had a way with words, and I would joke, “Yeah, maybe sideways,” and thus the first stanza.
The first part of third stanza is an obvious homage to (read: blatant ripoff of?) “Closer to Free” by the BoDeans.
Ultimately, this is just a sappy love poem that I’m sure I meant with all my heart when I wrote it. After breaking up with this girl I made a resolution that I wouldn’t write any more stupid love poems for girls. Of course I broke it with the next girl that dated.
The original, even more sappy, version is reprinted below. It has a few extra lines, and a few changed lines. I like the “official” version better.
Actually, reading over the two versions again, the differences in the third and fourth stanzas change the tone of the poem. Interesting.