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You're confused the way so many people are, who don't understand the perspective of God. You keep thinking that death is the most terrible thing that can happen to a person, but to God, death just means you're coming home a few moments ahead of schedule. To God, the dreadful outcome of a human life is when that person embraces sin and rejects the joy that God offers. So of all the millions who might die in a war, each individual life is tragic only if it ends in sin.
-Sister Carlotta, Shadow of the Hegemon by Orson Scott Card
Poetism Commentary: "Illusion"
The poem in question: Illusion
Ugh, is this poem bad. I know that a good number of my poems aren’t masterpieces, but I have never really liked this one, even after the revisionism it went through to get to the form it is in now. Unfortunately, I don’t have the original to compare it with. It would be nice to see how crappy it was at the outset.
Anyway, this poem is about the devil’s path and all that, a common theme from this era of my poetry, as you may have (read: probably have not) read thus far in the blog.
In the first stanza, someone has decided to try and lead other people astray, but doesn’t know how. Part of him believes what he is preaching, but for some reason he has a hard time pressing the beliefs on others.
The other guy doesn’t believe the lies, and knows they are lies, but he’s in marketing, just doing his job. That’s why he wins, I guess.
And there is the lame commentary for the lame poem. I’m sure I could write something more insightful about it and try to explore its themes more (I do think there is a valid theme, I just think it’s ineptly expressed, and easy to understand, anyway), but my parenthetical comment just explained why I won’t.
However, this poem does remind me of a forum I’ve perused over the past couple of days. For the sake of keeping these commentaries focused more on the actual commentary, though, the story will get its own blog entry.