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I have a tendency to wear my mind on my sleeve, and a history of losing my shirt.
-Barenaked Ladies, One Week
Poetism Commentary: “a new beginning”
The poem in question: a new beginning
I wrote this poem for an assignment in my freshman English class at BYU. I don’t remember what the assignment was, specifically.
As with many others, this poem is about inner demons and what ifs, but with a much more hopeful tone, kind of like From now on. I may have mentioned this before, but I always found it much easier to write well (what I considered well, anyway) about bleaker subjects than happy ones, and in bleaker tones, so poem this was something of a breakthrough for me. Not only is it hopeful in tone, but I think it’s also decently written. Double whammy!
I don’t have the original copy, but I can tell from some erase marks in my notebook and an old web print out that the last stanza originally read differently. The original version—likely what I turned in for my assignment—is:
In fact, all of the copies I have, except the one now on my web site, have that last line. I do like “and set out toward higher ground” much better though. In fact, I really like the message of the last stanza.